There really is not much that I could chance in my theme at all. I was really quite content with how i wrote and my sort of 'style' so, i just decided to stick with it.
In his comment, Joe mentioned that my introduction was just a little bit choppy and confusing so. I attempted to straighten it (along with some other parts in the story) out. After all, the story needs to make sense.
Aside from following that little bit of advice from Joe, I decided that a lot of the detaiols are mentioned and occur just int he way they were chrased so.. I think it'll be ok.
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